originally published, almost verbatim, at www.bubblews.com where it was actually a pair of posts, their format being shorter.  The other site referenced below is Open Salon. 
 

At another site, someone I knew asked about poetry, as in free verse. I don't know anything about free verse. It's never exactly made sense to me. If I'm pushed into a form, like haiku or limericks, I'm fine. I once had an entire online conversation in limericks - find a rhythm and it gets easier. But this structureless stuff? I don't exactly understand it.

So I'm experimenting.

Experimenting I'm so. It understand exactly don't I. Stuff structureless this but?

This is something I call InVerse.

I will make
an attempt to
draw a crude picture with my words. I don't
know if I have the skills to pull this off. I kind of
suspect that I don't. Which is a pity. Not easy.

It's an attempt to draw a high top.
What do I call this?

ConVerse. 
 



..And..............if
........I.............were
......to.............do
.......it.............way
...way.............way
...way............down
..very............deep
under............ground
...and............took
.......a............drink
while............I
...was............down
there,...........would
.......I............be
..well.........,..versed?
.........splish
..........blub
 
 
The periods are a pain, but I have learned the hard way, both at the site where I published this originally and this one, that hundreds of space bar clicks disappear in some sort of autoediting function. The above would look better with spaces, but I just can't guarantee they'd load and, when they don't, the graphic is completely senseless.  

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Comment by JMac1949 Today on October 21, 2014 at 12:47pm

Unfortunately the graphic doesn't work here.  I'll go looking for a more coherent version.  R&L ;-)

Comment by JMac1949 Today on October 21, 2014 at 12:50pm

Sigh... couldn't get there from here. :-(

Comment by koshersalaami on October 21, 2014 at 12:50pm

Imagine the periods gone and visualize the shape. 

Comment by JMac1949 Today on October 21, 2014 at 12:53pm

Doh! Now I see it! 

Comment by koshersalaami on October 21, 2014 at 1:04pm

Well, JMac, glad you're well-versed

Comment by Arthur James on October 21, 2014 at 2:58pm

`

you notice?

at ` closed '

salon ` ah! '

` over 100 '

views and 

17- comments.

`

I pause...

I happy i

no have to

ride a ` Inn '

motel `elevator '

up ` 3-floors '

and ` fear mule '

who go ` heehaw '

IF she hear ` mule '

who no ` kicks Ya's '

in groin ` on ride on '

a Ferris ` carnival's '

Fall's ` corn-maze '

hay ride in ` NYC '

`

I need to read the

less deranged poets

fron thee ` Greek days '

and sip AYE` OHO` O '

SO-SO A ` calming sooth '

GOAT OR ` MOO COW'S '

BED-ROOM ` HOT-TOTTY '

hated ups ` warm goat milk...

Comment by koshersalaami on October 21, 2014 at 3:13pm

Arthur,

You move into the new or rebuilt house??

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