Sufi Dancer                              

If I wanted to be a poet

How could I not write a Gimmick

Some versical form of a Limmerick

That others would read and then show it

To strangers they met in the park.

 

I could pretend to be Sufi

Maybe I’d be Pakistani

Some imams Westernized granny

Making my Art simply goofy

And spin as I wrote in the dark.

 

Wait! I’d just fill up the book

Clog up the pages with verses

Each entry striving for worstest,

Nonsense abounding, reason forsook,

Believing I’m hitting the mark.

 

In a frenzy I’d write ever faster

Perched on my doghouse like Snoopy

I’d insert punctuation quite loopy

The Bardess would glimpse when I paster

A clangorous image quite stark.

 

Poets, it seems, can see in the dark.

While artists want plenty of light

In order to augment their sight

As they paint in plein air in the park

Poets see clearly the spark in the dark,

And clearly the absence of light.

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Comment by alsoknownas on November 30, 2017 at 6:52am

I believe that coherency and a genuine effort to exchange are essential elements in a respectful and successful adult conversation, whether it be face to face or in writing. 

Comment by Rodney Roe on November 30, 2017 at 7:05am

I worry that this, while genuine, is perhaps too opaque.

Comment by alsoknownas on November 30, 2017 at 7:17am

Rodney,

I see the post itself as your own muse, a piece of artistic wonderment. I see the comment section differently.

It doesn't matter if the post is "opaque", as you have described it. That is all well and good, and if I ask you to explain it, as if you hadn't succeeded in my view of being understandable, I do not think that you would have any obligation to respond. 

If on the other hand you saw fit to land anywhere you please, as often as it occurs to you to do so, littering the post writer's area for others to correspond, with random comments full of invective and slurs I would see you as essentially an unacceptable addition and distraction, not worthy of defense.

Comment by alsoknownas on November 30, 2017 at 8:00am

Ron Powell,

Imagine for a moment that you have just segued into a well thought out portion of a medley. You're playing on the house piano in a jazz bistro where the occasional tinkling of the bartender stirring the ice in a drink is expected.

The dishwasher drops a stack of plates.

The room startles but you keep tempo. A smile accompanies your playing and attention returns to your efforts and the room is back enjoying it.

The dishwasher drops another stack of plates, this one louder. He can be heard complaining loudly. Nobody hears your passing chords taking us to another piece.

Your face changes. It's no longer in concert with the medley and the mood intended.

The dishwasher sticks his head out the kitchen and hollers at you to quit playing so loudly because his plate smashing is what is most important.

You finish the evening eventually, gather your coat and hat to head home, uncertain if you will return to play this room again.

The dishwasher sticks his head out the kitchen door one last time and tells you goodnight, wishing you sweet dreams and smiles, expecting one in return.

aye

~

'//

.............

Comment by Ron Powell on November 30, 2017 at 8:02am

For my taste and from my perspective AJ's comments would be palatable if he stayed focused and on message. However, when he comes to my blog with a bone to pick, or some fat to chew, that bears absolutely no relationship whatsoever to what I've painstakingly written, I take it as a disrespectful affront to me and my effort to communicate in clear, concise, comprehensible prose.

As an educator who has spent a career and a lifetime evaluating and guiding the communicative capacities of others, I find it irksome and annoying to constantly remind folks here to remain civil, and at least broadly responsive.

AJ's penchant for corresponding with others on unrelated matters in comment streams is disruptive, distracting, and disrespectful. 

We all tend to read, very carefully, the comments placed on our posts. Response and reaction to what you've written can be, and very often is, heady and exhilarating...

All too often an AJ comment is a taxing conundrum and a unresponsive drag on the leisurely ebb and flow, or the fast paced staccato rhythms, or measured intellectual/academic exchanges in the discourse generated by a post and it's comment stream.

I often get the feeling/impression that AJ doesn't fully comprehend what he reads, but feels inclined/compelled to post a comment, leaving a footprint that may not be consistent with the landscape or terrain....

It's extremely annoying particularly when his comment has nothing to do with anything other than his attempt to lash out at someone for some imagined offense or transgression against him....

Frankly, it's getting old, and I'm getting tired of it....

 

In this regard, I'm in ful and complete agreement with aka.

Comment by Ron Powell on November 30, 2017 at 8:39am

If you look at the comment feed on the front page it is overrun with notifications of AJ'S  comments...

Not a problem if he had something of meaning, value, or substance to say.

I can only imagine what it looks like to a,casual  net surfer, or an internet research specialist.

Comment by koshersalaami on November 30, 2017 at 9:36am

I have a different issue, in addition to his propensity to function as seaweed, wrapping around every keel, propellor, oar, paddle, and swimmer's arm, and making it impossible to get from A to B easily. Some others share my issue but I'm afraid it's more mine than anyone's. He writes about me constantly, and everywhere. I'm not only referenced by (misspelled, and it's deliberate because I've corrected it) name, I'm referenced as Snoopy, plus I think occasionally as Jewish Blogger. (Not as Rabbi, that's Jon.) This is especially weird because I don't delete most of his comments. And the constant references aren't exactly complimentary. They include made up stories plus a series of - veiled in somewhat opaque language perhaps for deniability - accusations. And of course insults. Not to mention quite a bit of condescension. My point in my case is that he is absolutely not benign. Nor is he to AKA, nor Moki, nor ABG. 

I don't like deleting in general but the truth is it makes no sense not to. Unlike others here I'm not terribly worried about retaliation. What's he going to do, talk about me more? I have to say Enough. I don't like how personal it gets and I don't like his crazy sense of entitlement. The First Amendment doesn't give you the right to piss on everyone's lawns, nor does it give you the right to have your every letter to the editor and editorial published. We are the editors of our blogs. 

I don't like piling on, but he's been piling on me for years. Enough. 

By the way, Rodney, I like the post.  

Comment by Anna Herrington on November 30, 2017 at 10:14am

I like this poem, Rodney, although any concerns about being opaque are rather unwarranted, imho.... nice image of whirling Sufi Dervish, too. 

(I had to look up and remind myself...) From wikipedia:  'dervish or darvesh is someone guiding a Sufi Muslim down a path or "tariqah", known for their extreme poverty and austerity. A tiny percentage of dervishes were Jews. Their focus is on the universal values of love and service, deserting the illusions of ego to reach God.'

Interesting choice  ; )

Seems to me reading these comments here, every comment clarifies the mind of the commenter quite well, anyway, but you gentlemen seem to be asking/judging a free spirit, an rather untethered one, an elder with issues, a veteran - who knows what else is going on - to wrestle his mind to what you grounded ones need for yourselves.... 

If this was a street corner with all of us in 3D, would you all be pointing out Arthur or another alternatively-oriented soul to everyone else who passes by and let them know this one doesn't belong, he's not behaving the way you wish he would?

I think some might smile, say hi, and move on, some might ignore and move on, some might scowl at him, push past, yet *move on.*

Who would stand there and engage the guy with, "Why aren't you behaving correctly? I need you to change or go away?'

(...and maybe the dishwasher in above comment who crashes the dishes has Parkinson's and the shouting is Turrets.)

My two cents.

Carry on.

Comment by Tom Cordle on November 30, 2017 at 10:43am

Poets, it seems, can see in the dark.
While artists want plenty of light

Those two lines alone were worth the trip

Comment by Ron Powell on November 30, 2017 at 10:51am

@AH; ." My two cents...."

...and here's your one cent in change...

"Who would stand there and engage the guy with, "Why aren't you behaving correctly?"

I would...And ask  "Is there anything I can help you with? "

Anna, you're missing the point here...

To use your own analogy;

I eould have serious problems with a victim of PTSD or anyone else following me around mumbling shit to himself and anyone within earshot crowding me out of my space.... the space to which I'm entitledto to occupy as I choose or see fit free of contamination,or pollution, and litter...

I'm followed all over the place and my name is mentioned for no apparent reason...

Kosh iliterally hounded snd accused of all manner of things...

You would think that with all of theobjections it would stop...

It doesn't.  In fact it seems to have grown worse....

Try trading places or putting youself in our shoes...

Then talk about a "free spirit"...

 

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